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Fanfic Word Selection/Entrees #1; Entrees are entered here
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Topic Started: Feb 9 2010, 01:30 AM (1,733 Views)
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Feb 19 2010, 10:17 PM
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Sorry for the double post, but I just want to remind everyone that the time to write a story is running out. You have just three days left to enter.
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Feb 22 2010, 07:05 AM
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Nightmare Nadia's WIFE
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I'll have mine in later today since today is the deadline. My original I was working on got erased, so I had to make up a very shorter one. T_T But yes, I will post it up later today~
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Feb 22 2010, 08:39 PM
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Okay you still got time. I hope it comes out good.
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Feb 23 2010, 05:36 AM
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Nightmare Nadia's WIFE
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Kinda alter-verse DBZ since events are weird and don't match the anime. I tried for a heavy focus on father/son and friendship emotions/relationships. I hope its okay. Its not comedy though :\
Spoiler: click to toggle "This one...looks like my daddy." A chubby hand unfurled a finger and pointed to one of the clouds that dotted the clear cerulean skies. The cloud in mentioning did in fact bear a striking resemblance to the boy's father. Gohan and Kuririn were relaxing on the grass near the entrance of Gohan's humble abode that he shared with his mother, ChiChi. The ground was still wet from the morning dew. Gohan and Kuririn could feel the moisture as it soaked into their thinly-fabricated clothing.
Kuririn had a mesmerized expression slapped across his face as his eyes traveled along with the quickly moving cloud the young half-Saiya-jin had pointed out. "Wow, Gohan, you're right, that really does look like Goku! Amazing." The bald man sat upright and began dusting off his pants. Gohan turned quickly on his side, a question worn in his dark eyes.
"Are you leaving already?" Came the disappointed remark. It held a pinpoint of hope in it as well. Kuririn laughed cheerily as he looked over at his younger friend.
Standing up, the taller man put a hand to his forehead and sighed. "You know ChiChi is going to want you inside soon. I can almost hear her voice now. Gohan Gohan Come eat your lunch I made!" The last bit was done in an impression so well crafted that the dark haired kid had to crack a smile. Soon Gohan was standing as well in a pose similar to that of Kuririn. The young boy looked up into the other's face in something akin to respect. Kuririn didn't look it, but he was strong for someone whose blood didn't hold the alien properties that young Gohan's did. Kuririn had protected him on a number of occasions. If it weren't for Kuririn... "Huh!?" The bald man reeled in surprise as Gohan's strong arms grabbed him with incredible force, pulling him into a hug. The boy's face was buried into the man's chest, where his voice came out muffled.
"I love you, Kuririn."
With a goofy smile, Kuririn tousled Gohan's messy mop of black locks before laughing. "Heh. I love you too, Gohan."
It took a good moment for Gohan to finally pull away, only to stare into his friend's face again. "How about...let's go to THAT PLACE..."
At the mentioning of the place, Kuririn's expression melted into something more serious. "No way Gohan. You're mother would kill me if we went running off without her permission. You know she doesn't want you to..."
"Come on!" Came the excited interruption, and Kuririn found himself being pulled along through the thickets of trees and blankets of bushes at the kid's will.
The vibrant laughter from Gohan stirred the birds and squirrels from their resting places. Before too long a clearing opened up. The sunlight that had once been blotted out by the overhanging foliage now filtered down from the heavens upon a single spot barely big enough for four people to stand arm's length apart in. "This is the place!" The boy let go of his friend's hand and scurried over to the place of interest where a group of saplings were growing comfortably in the spring wind.
As young Gohan bend down to examine the saplings, Kuririn scoured the area with his eyes. Goku had trained the boy in this exact spot for many a day. 'This place must remind him of his father...' Kuririn thought with a slight frown, knowing that Goku had passed away some short time ago. The Saiya-jin warrior had meant the world to his son, and now that he was gone, Kuririn had made a pact with himself to care for the boy as if he were his own child. The boy's mother had taken the passing far worse, so he had even vowed to keep her company during the difficult time. Suddenly a small rustling noise caught his ears and his eyes darted to the direction where leaves rattled in procession. 'Something's coming?' He didn't want to be too hasty, but he felt his muscles stiffen just in case trouble went down. Gohan was still marveling over how much the saplings had grown, unaware of the strange noise emanating from behind him. Curiosity piqued, Kuririn shuffled over to the bushes and peeked in. A bright white stream of hot light burst in his face, knocking him backwards. He landed on his back a foot away with a sharp cry.
"Stay away!" A shrill voice called, mixed with both fury and fright. Gohan turned, wide-eyed, to face Kuririn, before rushing to his side.
Taking Kuririn's body into his arms, Gohan called out, "Are you okay!? What happened!?"
Though faint, the other man looked into the boy's face with a smile, "I'll be okay." But soon his eyes lolled back into his head as he lost consciousness. Raging with worry and anger, Gohan gently laid Kuririn down on the ground, putting his hand on the ma's chest before walking over to where the noise now came louder than ever. Gohan proceeded to the bush and peered in, but quickly reeled back when a fist plummeted in his direction. Using a foot he countered with a swift kick. The figure flew out and twisted into a roll before it stopped. Apparently whomever was spying had already been injured... Their clothes were tattered beyond simple repair and blood caked their limbs. Gohan stood still for a moment, chest heaving, making sure the other wouldn't revive enough to fight back. When he had confirmed that it was MOSTLY safe, he approached the figure and turned it over. A gasp erupted from his mouth as the memories rushed in.
The injured alien bore a nasty resemblance to one of his father's nemesis. Garlick Jr., an evil Makyo-jin who had once kidnapped the younger Gohan in attempt to gain the dragonballs. With the power of immortality granted from his success, Garlick Jr. vowed to take reign over the Earth, his new Kingdom of terror and bloodshed. The Makyo-jin were a demonic race, capable of controlling all evil spirits bound to the world, giving them physical form... And this man... No, more of a boy, had the same features. Pointed ears, tiny teeth protruding from his lips, beady eyes... The only majour difference was that this being had hair of the purest black. Gohan stared into the other boy's face, his expression hot. "Who are you? What are you doing here? Why did you attack Kuririn?"
"Ha." The boy spat. His voice even had the same gravel that Garlick Jr.'s possessed. "My name's Pepper, boy. Don't get too cocky, I know who you are."
"Pepper." Gohan said, more of musing the name over than anything. He squatted on his haunches, studying the boy more. "Who are you exactly? You look so much like someone I know."
"Garlick Jr. My father."
"What!?"
"That's right, squirt. But don't worry, I wasn't given any orders to kill you or nothing. Just looking for dragonballs. I thought you and your buddy might be trouble and do me in." Pepper tried to shift his weight around, but winced and decided to lay flat.
Gohan looked the other boy over. He seemed to be around his age or perhaps a bit older. "I didn't know he had a son." He stood again, brushing stray strands of hair from his face, "What do you want the dragonballs for?"
"Because you meddling brats put my dad into the Dead Zone. I'm going to wish him back."
"You don't look like your in a condition to do anything."
"Shut your trap!" Pepper struggled to upright himself, putting every ounce of force into his elbows. His breathing became more ragged as he finally stood on his feet. "I'm more than capable of kicking your ***** right now."
Not worried in the least, Gohan actually let himself lax a little. "Its okay. I don't want to fight."
"Huh? You scared?" Pepper retorted, smirking.
Gohan closed his eyes and shook his head, making his hair sway. "Nuh uh. You see..." He opened his eyes again, and hints of tears formed in the corners. His voice became soft yet serious, direct, straight forward. "My daddy's gone too. He died. So I know what its like to not have a dad around."
Pepper's face actually softened at the half Saiya-jin boys words, though his face didn't care an ounce of the painful emotion Gohan's voice did. "You're dad died? That Goku guy?"
Nodding solemnly, the first tears fell, tracing paths down Gohan's cheeks. "He was the best dad. He trained me here at this spot, too, sometimes. And he never hates anyone, no matter how mean or evil they are."
For the first time, Pepper didn't carry malice in his tone. "He sounds like he was remarkable, eh, I guess."
"Yeah. Dad wouldn't want me to fight you. So I'm not going to. He told me to have mercy on my enemies."
"That's stupid."
Gohan's eyes flared for a moment.
Much to Gohan's surprise, Pepper stumbled forward and put a hand on Gohan's head. "Cheer up kid. It isn't the end of the world. Hell, you must act just like him. I act like mine too, though, mine is nowhere near as pansy as yours." Pepper laughed through clenched teeth before removing his hand and painfully motioning towards Kuririn. "Take care of your friend. I'll let you go this time. You kinda remind me of myself with my old man." With that, the Makyo-jin started off.
"Wait."
Pepper turned around, "Yeah? What is it?"
Gohan smiled, "My name is Gohan. And here, you might need this." He dug into his pocket and tossed the other boy an object, which was skillfully caught.
Pepper examined the strange food before asking, "What is it?"
"It'll help you regain some energy. You might need it to get home..." Gohan's mind wandered. ChiChi was probably worried sick about him.
"What a kid." And Pepper was gone.
Gohan wiped the moisture from his eyes, then went back to Kuririn's side. The man would be fine. Gohan lifted his body to his shoulders and began the course back home. "You'll be okay." he could almost hear his mother's voice, smell the sweet aroma of lunch...He could almost feel his father's shadow following him, proudly on the way. And as the sky came into view, Gohan saw that familiar cloud, commending him for his behaviour. "Thanks, Daddy."
Edited by GarlicJr, Feb 23 2010, 05:39 AM.
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Feb 23 2010, 04:13 PM
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Thanks for the stories everyone. All the stories are fantastic! They are very well done. I'll have a special judge check them out and tell you who is the winner.
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Feb 24 2010, 11:53 AM
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It truly was a Shawshank redemption
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Great job with the story GarlicJr, don't worry about it not being comedy, I only did comedy because that way I could do it off the top of my head :P But I like yours, a nice short story that deals with interesting themes.
I'm looking forward to the next competition!
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Feb 24 2010, 07:48 PM
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Has Edward tied for her convience <3
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A WINNER IS YOU ....wait I'm judging Okay well then: Here is ze order of winnarz! 1st-Mitas with his fic about the cloud thieving K-man 2nd- zZzZzlacker with his fic about Goku coming to terms with his sexuality 3rd-Garlic Jr with her fic on Gohan and Pepper discovering friendship through grief. (though you deserve first in terms of your fics genre D: ) Thank you to all who entered! And I suppose for those who aren't first, you get a request from me :3 if you wanna make it an art-trade feel free.
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Feb 24 2010, 08:00 PM
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The winner gets their fanfic posted in my blog and also in fanfic hall of fame. Fanfic Zone Blog Congrats Mitas on your victory! Everyone else did a great job on their fanfics. If there are any improvements of the contest you'd like to be made, just contact me. I thought it might be better to vote for the winners, but I didn't want it to be a popular vote decision. 2nd place winner gets to choose the next theme/words. Thank you for all your participation. I hope to see you at the next fanfic zone competition.
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Feb 24 2010, 10:04 PM
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Nightmare Nadia's WIFE
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Awesome. Mitas' fic was my favourite as well. xD I kind of do wish we get to vote. Though it wouldn't have made a difference here since my fav won anyhow. <3
Also, don't expect any comedy from me (though those tend to be my favourite kinds of fics anyhow) <.< I'm bad at writing happier emotions. XD; So just gotta bear with me on that. And we get a request you say! I already know what I want. ^____^ I'll PM you.
As for improvements can we have themed fic contests? Like genre. I'd love to brush up on some horror/gore fic skills on par with others, or action, since I don't write those well. I'm trying to get back into writing, and coming up with stories on genres I don't write well. If we don't mine are always going to be the sad angst or depression or just cheesy kinds since that's my most comfortable genre. I want to write something (or be forced to write something) that is out of my comfort zone, but if we have open genre I tend to stick to my roots. >__<;
Also a little tab of how stories will be judged would also help out. Since we don't know what types of stories the mystery person even likes... Maybe that person can choose genre. We kind of just shoot around in the dark the other way, which makes it more difficult. Creativity, originality, sticking to genre, etc. would help. I only say this because of the remark about the genre that was made about my fic (I don't care if I win personally, just to help others not feel as if their genre wasn't liked) which makes it seem to others that they were picked out of genre only (if you know what I mean). I don't want to bore the judge because they might not like a genre I write. XD
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Feb 25 2010, 12:36 AM
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It truly was a Shawshank redemption
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Oh cool I won, thanks to the judge lol My vote would have gone to GalicJr, her's seemed as if it had a lot more thought put into it than mine and Hustla's :P But I enjoyed this, can't wait for the next one.
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Feb 25 2010, 12:49 AM
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Nightmare Nadia's WIFE
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I also can't wait! <3 I hope next one starts soon. ^-^ I'm beginning to love to write again.
Thanks Mitas, but I liked your a lot more, it made me giggle. xD
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Feb 25 2010, 01:13 AM
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Wow thanks Garlic Jr for the ideas. I think I'm going to make a new topic for Fanfic zone for some ideas for the next one. This was just a trial and error to see how things would work. I hope things run more smoothly the next time.
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Feb 25 2010, 01:51 AM
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I think it went quite well! I'd have liked to see more people enter, though....and I wish my brother's hadn't erased my initial fanfic I was going to write for it and forced me to write a short fic in like 2 hours span. -__-"
But this time I has my own computer back, so expect a longer fic from me this next round, thank God.
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